I have had some interesting feedback already from Beta readers and others.
You have responded to my request and here are two of the main comments along with my responses. Keep sending them, so we can make this book as good as it can be.
The main feedback is: there are too many characters in the early chapters.
I agree, and there are 3 things I can and probably will do.
- Introduce the characters into the story more gradually.
- Produce a list of characters.
- Produce family trees for the main families.
The next feedback is that the geography was confusing for some readers.
I had thought of this and will put a map in the final version of the book, showing northern France and southern England at the end of the Ice Age, around 10,000 years ago. It might show the present coastline for comparison. Of course the words England and France would have been meaningless in the Stone Age.
Thirdly, the language seems a bit too sophisticated at times.
Nobody knows what language they spoke, but scientists believe it was something like the Basque language. The main reason is that DNA evidence suggests the earliest post-Ice-Age Britons were closely related to the Basques. That is not as surprising as you may think, since the nearest place where humans survived during worst of the freeze was northern Spain. I once met a few Basques, but we conversed in French, and I never learnt anything of their language.
We don’t know how sophisticated or otherwise the language of our Stone Age ancestors was, but it’s the impression that counts. Therefore I am going through the draft again trying to use the simplest words and expressions possible.
Some feedback consisted of questions.
I will be answering some of those in another blog. I hope you will find the questions, and perhaps the answers, interesting. Keep asking.
Please let me know if you would like a draft of the book for you to comment on, as I could still use some more friendly critics.